day tripper

These were really nice. for all the pictures I'd have to say that your main point would be focus and perseption. Next time, try an odd angle that will give ...

I like it, but what would have made it better would be if there was the sun behind it. Right now, it looks like something you'd see when you look ...

Whoaa thats so neat. i really love it.:D:D I cant really find anything wrong with it. Good job!(: especially on pain, haah. I can never draw on there. d:

Haha I just read about the snake bites, I'm getting them. I loves them!(: Anywho, you still have me amazingly engaged in this and I'm so excited. haha Instead of ...

Wowwww. Like woww. I really really really really liked this. it was amazing in every way. It confused me a little when he was talking in the end but then ...

“This is your room.” The receptionist informed me as we stopped in front of a maple door with the number 82 on it. 82? Were there really more than 50 ...

Aw this is cutee! It reminds me of my mom, hahaha. I know that sounds weird but she always talks about us (my brother, sister, and I) about growing up ...

in my opinion, a long story is good. but this was a little too long. Maybe put it into two parts? Also, the characters keep switching. Other then that, it ...

This story was unbelievably sweet and it kept me reading. I really liked it, it got to my heart. Good job(: As for critiquing, I agree with all the other ...

This is a little graphic, but that's okay, all writers are not the same. I rather liked this, for once something was from a boy's perspective. (:

To tell you the truth, I was engaged in this the whole way. I dont know how to say it but you are just a very unique writer. I didn't ...

Fixed it. Thanks a lot(:

Ahh, okay. I was reading over your critique and I get what you mean now. I'm fixing it as we speak. Thanks(:

Hey, so I know I keep doing side projects but it actually helps a lot with my writers block on Welcome to Miami! Chapter five should be out soon enough ...

I say that you should work a little more before posting. Also, you have the first part in first person but the other rest is in third. It confused me. ...